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under these sheets
I'm yearning for an ounce
weather love or cocaine
it doesn't matter....

slippery hands
leave behind the stench
your smiling
and I'm crying

the lines run down
tiny rivulets of my
father as he beat me
and my mother as she drank

on my 21st birthday
I got a goodbye and a gun
a good luck and a good gone
it stung and it's still swollen

i'm not a concubine
I'm just a service
call me anytime
and use me

one little moan
will make a man cry
one little pill
will make another hope die

my skin is itching
and I am scratching
away the dead skin
the dead dreams

'cuz corpses don't have fantasies
people are so mean to me
why can't you just let me be
I've given you my body...

there's bags on my eyes
and bags at my door
I'll cut myself today
'cuz you know that I'm a whore

under these sheets
i'm just a little
under these word's
I'm just a little girl

help me....
©2004-2009 ~PensivePonderer
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Author's Comments

This is dedicated to my new Idol, Rufus Wainright.

He's flippin' amazing...

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:iconheikou:
'cuz corpses don't have fantasies

*points* Fav line.

Fabtabulous! *claps*

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“Forever…is such a long time…to be alone…”

"$20.00 will get you a room, $50.00 will get you a photographer."
:icond-istancexx:
wow. im making this a fav.

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"If you lived here you'd have less non-broken bones and more crushed spirits." -Strongbad
:iconandromache:
sooo powerful! amazing. intense emotion too

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Making your life pinker since 1987
:iconruchy:
"one little moan
will make a man cry
one little pill
will make another hope die"

love that stanza

oh well i think you may win this comp...

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:spotlight-left: =DaCalifornia :spotlight-right:
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:iconpensiveponderer:
I'd love to, I won the last one in a tie...I hope I can bat 2-2. I liked this one, simple...not as flashy as other's concepts, but the concept is more real and raw, then most will do.

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My name is Vego
:iconruchy:
well the one thing on the subject matter that i really like is the fact it's original....
it's something hasn't been done.
like some one wrote about the rocky horror picture show...it was nicely written, form and all, but it's not difficult to take an idea that's already been though and just re-word it...

what i tried to do with mine was instead of taking an old story and just retelling it..taking an old story and giving it a new life...by giving my opinions and such...i am really happy with how it came out - and mate if i lose to you i will be proud.

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:spotlight-left: =DaCalifornia :spotlight-right:
Stay Current. DaCalifornia News!
:iconfirelily24:
I love this. You captured the feeling, I think, of being almost numbed to the things you do with your body, and also the way people are still children inside while they are using their bodies the way adults do. Excellent work.

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"Ships are safe in harbor - but that is not what ships are for." ~anonymous

poetzhaven
:iconmiseria-cantare:
wow :jawdrop:
This is such an emotional and powerful and unique piece!!! I hope you're proud of this poem because it is really a great piece of literature.
:+fav:
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"There is poetry in despair, and we sang with unrivaled beauty, bitter elegies of savagery and eloquence." AFI
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:jawdrop: amazing. original, beautifully written, and just wow.:+favlove:

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Love is pain, but it is a pain we need to survive.

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